"Stroll at the beach"

[Rays_Inferno]

         On a sunny evening, Azumarill and his son, Marill, went out for a stroll on the beach. Little did they know, this stroll would soon turn into their last time seeing each other. "Ahhh, it's a beautiful day. Isn't it, Marill?" Azumarill asked.
          "Yes, it is," Marill happily replied.
          "Well, let's go pick some berries and bring them home. Alright?" Azumarill said.
          "Okay, that sounds fun!" Marill exclaimed with a big smile on his face.
          The two headed towards the green berry bush across from the blue, rampaging waters. They started picking up all of the berries that were on the bush. Each berry was put into a little brown basket that Azumarill was holding at the time. As they picked up more and more berries, Azumarill heard a sound in the grass, which to them, sounded like sudden movement. "Step back, Marill," Azumarill informed him with a slight change of tone in his voice. Out from the grass, a green pokemon with large wings and sharp arms which seemed to form some kind of knife or blade came out and attempted to attack! "A scyther! Marill, go run back to the Sanctuary!" Azumarill exclaimed before he was struck in the back by the scyther with a false swipe.
          "Yes, sir," Marill replied while running north past the water and into some bushes. He hid there.
          Azumarill got up quickly and let out a powerful blast of water from his mouth at the scyther who was now lying in the sand because of the impact. Scyther got up and rubbed his blades together, letting out a screeching sound. His blades begin to glow as he ran at Azumarill. Scyther then struck Azumarill with another powerful false swipe. Azumarill was knocked in the sand and was struggling to get up! Azumarill pushed and pushed to try and get up. He put his hands down and tried to lift himself up before he was hit with quick attack! Azumarill rolled back in the sand and lied there for a while.
          "Should've thought about picking a fight with me!" Scyther exclaimed at his foe.
          "Why are you... Arg... Doing this?" Azumarill struggled to say.
          "Because you are now in my turf!" Scyther replied.
          Azumarill struggled to get up again. Out of no where, Marill jumped into the air and hit scyther with a tackle. The tackle didn't do much, but it was enough to get scyther off balance a little. The scyther then attempted to strike the Marill with a false swipe, but Azumarill jumped in front of it and was knocked out! Marill watched as his dad fell in the sand. Scyther walked over to the Marill and grabbed it while saying, "Let's go, kid. You're with me now."
          After a day, Azumarill awakens and looks around seeing nothing but sand and water.
          "Marill where are you?" Azumarill asked himself. Azumarill heads towards the grass in search of his son.
          Is Marill okay? Is the scyther still around? Find out in the next story!

[DarkMeow]

Erm.. You have a lot of spelling and grammatical errors.
You would be having a stroll on the beach, not in it or at it.
I would be happy to edit it.. If you wanted.

[Rays_Inferno]

It would be nice if you would edit it..its that something was wrong every time i typed my little box scrolled up and it was meessing me up! half the time i couldnt even tell what i was writeing cause of it! but if you would edit it that would be nice

[DarkMeow]

^^ Okies. I'll edit it then post it here..
There will probably still be some mistakes, but I'll do my best.

[Lt.Spears]

iaoewjiofew English teacher's worst nightmare. The title was the reason I clicked on it. XD If I wasn't so sensitive to errors like that then I wouldn't be having a heart attack. Ahwel, Practice makes perfect.

[DarkMeow]

Oh, I forgot to post the edited version..

iaoewjiofew English teacher's worst nightmare. The title was the reason I clicked on it. XD If I wasn't so sensitive to errors like that then I wouldn't be having a heart attack. Ahwel, Practice makes perfect.

Agreed. xD
Bad grammar and spelling kill me.

[DarkMeow]

         On a sunny evening, Azumarill and his son, Marill, went out for a stroll on the beach. Little did they know, this stroll would soon turn into their last time seeing each other.
          "Ahhh, it's a beautiful day. Isn't it, Marill?" Azumarill asked.
          "Yes, it is," Marill happily replied.
          "Well, let's go pick some berries and bring them home. Alright?" Azumarill said.
          "Okay, that sounds fun!" Marill exclaimed with a big smile on his face.
          The two headed towards the green berry bush across from the blue, rampaging waters. They started picking up all of the berries that were on the bush. Each berry was put into a little brown basket that Azumarill was holding at the time. As they picked up more and more berries, Azumarill heard a sound in the grass, which to them, sounded like sudden movement.
         "Step back, Marill," Azumarill informed him with a slight change of tone in his voice.
         Out from the grass, a green pokemon with large wings and sharp arms which seemed to form some kind of knife or blade came out and attempted to attack!
          "A scyther! Marill, go run back to the Sanctuary!" Azumarill exclaimed before he was struck in the back by the scyther with a false swipe.
          "Yes, sir," Marill replied while running north past the water and into some bushes. He hid there.
          Azumarill got up quickly and let out a powerful blast of water from his mouth at the scyther who was now lying in the sand because of the impact. Scyther got up and rubbed his blades together, letting out a screeching sound. His blades begin to glow as he ran at Azumarill. Scyther then struck Azumarill with another powerful false swipe. Azumarill was knocked in the sand and was struggling to get up! Azumarill pushed and pushed to try and get up. He put his hands down and tried to lift himself up before he was hit with quick attack! Azumarill rolled back in the sand and lied there for a while.
          "Should've thought about picking a fight with me!" Scyther exclaimed at his foe.
          "Why are you... Arg... Doing this?" Azumarill struggled to say.
          "Because you are now in my turf!" Scyther replied.
          Azumarill struggled to get up again. Out of no where, Marill jumped into the air and hit scyther with a tackle. The tackle didn't do much, but it was enough to get scyther off balance a little. The scyther then attempted to strike the Marill with a false swipe, but Azumarill jumped in front of it and was knocked out! Marill watched as his dad fell in the sand. Scyther walked over to the Marill and grabbed it while saying, "Let's go, kid. You're with me now."
          After a day, Azumarill awakens and looks around seeing nothing but sand and water.
          "Marill where are you?" Azumarill asked himself. Azumarill heads towards the grass in search of his son.
          Is Marill okay? Is the scyther still around? Find out in the next story!

Yay, no spelling errors!
I can't tell if it's supposed to be in present tense or past tense. *Changed some stuff to past tense* Rawr ):

[Leana]

         On a sunny evening, Azumarill and his son, Marill, went out for a stroll on the beach. Little did they know, this stroll would soon turn into their last time seeing each other. "Ahhh, it's a beautiful day. Isn't it, Marill?" Azumarill asked.
          "Yes, it is," Marill happily replied.
          "Well, let's go pick some berries and bring them home. Alright?" Azumarill said.
          "Okay, that sounds fun!" Marill exclaimed with a big smile on his face.
          The two headed towards the green berry bush across from the blue, rampaging waters. They started picking up all of the berries that were on the bush. Each berry was put into a little brown basket that Azumarill was holding at the time. As they picked up more and more berries, Azumarill heard a sound in the grass, which to them, sounded like sudden movement. "Step back, Marill," Azumarill informed him with a slight change of tone in his voice. Out from the grass, a green pokemon with large wings and sharp arms which seemed to form some kind of knife or blade came out and attempted to attack! "A scyther! Marill, go run back to the Sanctuary!" Azumarill exclaimed before he was struck in the back by the scyther with a false swipe.
          "Yes, sir," Marill replied while running north past the water and into some bushes. He hid there.
          Azumarill got up quickly and let out a powerful blast of water from his mouth at the scyther who was now lying in the sand because of the impact. Scyther got up and rubbed his blades together, letting out a screeching sound. His blades begin to glow as he ran at Azumarill. Scyther then struck Azumarill with another powerful false swipe. Azumarill was knocked in the sand and was struggling to get up! Azumarill pushed and pushed to try and get up. He put his hands down and tried to lift himself up before he was hit with quick attack! Azumarill rolled back in the sand and lied there for a while.
          "Should've thought about picking a fight with me!" Scyther exclaimed at his foe.
          "Why are you... Arg... Doing this?" Azumarill struggled to say.
          "Because you are now in my turf!" Scyther replied.
          Azumarill struggled to get up again. Out of no where, Marill jumped into the air and hit scyther with a tackle. The tackle didn't do much, but it was enough to get scyther off balance a little. The scyther then attempted to strike the Marill with a false swipe, but Azumarill jumped in front of it and was knocked out! Marill watched as his dad fell in the sand. Scyther walked over to the Marill and grabbed it while saying, "Let's go, kid. You're with me now."
          After a day, Azumarill awakens and looks around seeing nothing but sand and water.
          "Marill where are you?" Azumarill asked himself. Azumarill heads towards the grass in search of his son.
          Is Marill okay? Is the scyther still around? Find out in the next story!

Yay, no spelling errors!
I can't tell if it's supposed to be in present tense or past tense. *Changed some stuff to past tense* Rawr ):

Much better. c: Yay for correct grammar and spelling. XD

[Firefury55]

Much better. c: Yay for correct grammar and spelling. XD

Now for the thread title...

[DarkMeow]

Now for the thread title...

Agreed! So much. xD

It bothered me.

[Muffin]

Fixed.

[Sirus]

attempted to strike the Marill with a false swipe, but Azumarill jumped in front of it and was knocked out!

a false swipe... Azumarill was knocked out!

false swipe ... knocked out!

...what.

[WaterDude]

...what.

I guess it was a...  REAL swipe.